All you need to do is write an introduction where you talk about/ introduce each text and talk about why they are so different.
Then write about 8-10 paragraphs pointing out SIMILARITIES OR DIFFERENCES, always making sure you say WHY each language feature happens, and how that will affect the audience.
Then a quick conclusion saying which one was better and why.
And you're done!
You'll have blank sheets in the exam, so just make some brief notes and plans on your notes sheet to take in with you. I would recommend starting off talking about how they are similar and then move onto differences.
Good luck,
Mr Williams.
Monday, 14 October 2013
FOURTH IMPORTANT THING TO READ - EXTRACT TWO
As you will see from reading it, the second extract is totally different. It contains many features which are not seen in the first extract, but also a few that are so there are SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES.
Some of the features we see in EXTRACT TWO are:
*NON-INTENTIONAL or ACCIDENTAL PAUSES, shown by a '(.)' symbol. This shows that Jamie Oliver is trying to buy himself time or trying to think what to say next. This is what people do in real life - but it makes the extract sound less smooth than the first one.
*Lots of fillers such as 'er' which is where he is trying to think of things to say. Possibly this is where he is busy moving pans and so is not quite concentrating on what he is saying. You don't get this in rehearsed speech.
*HEDGING where he doesn't sound quite sure about what he is saying. He says 'sort of' and 'kinda' a lot.
*IMPERATIVES. This EXTRACT is a bit more forceful and he gives orders to the listners (Go get some). This might be more of a reflection of his personality
*Really informal in parts, might make it sound less professional (SOrt of, kinda, builders mug, you can DO rice etc)
*No real DISCOURSE MARKERS. Instead, he keeps saying 'So...' which is repetitive and shows that he hasn't really planned what he is going to say.
*DOes use some metaphors like 'Arsenal and 'secret weapon' and 'another planet' which show signs of rehearsal
*At other times he OVER USES words such as GORGEOUS showing that he can't think what to say as he is under pressure.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION - Like in the first extract (We're gathered here today)
*LOTS OF INFORMAL LANGUAGE - (gotta, kinda etc) These are part of Jamie Oliver's Sociolect but they show that he is less rehearsed and is talking more like he would talk to his friends rather than acting really professional.
*LOTS OF 'SOCIOLECT' TYPE WORDS. Just like in Extract ONE, Jamie Oliver uses words which make him likeable to his target audience (Gnarly, vibe)
*Still lots of empty adjectives (Gorgeous, exciting, beautiful)
*Bits of text which don't really make sense or their grammar is bad (So of course, how can you do it in 15 minutes). This just shows that people do make mistakes when they are not rehearsed.
*Jamie Oliver is a bit more obvious when talking to his target audience. He actually says 'I have written this for people on the go'. This might still be effective but is less well thought out than EXTRACT ONE.
*REPEATS PARTS OF THE VOICEOVER - He actually repeats the 'bi flavours, fast' bit, as if it is stuck in his head or he can't think of anything original to say.
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Some of the features we see in EXTRACT TWO are:
*NON-INTENTIONAL or ACCIDENTAL PAUSES, shown by a '(.)' symbol. This shows that Jamie Oliver is trying to buy himself time or trying to think what to say next. This is what people do in real life - but it makes the extract sound less smooth than the first one.
*Lots of fillers such as 'er' which is where he is trying to think of things to say. Possibly this is where he is busy moving pans and so is not quite concentrating on what he is saying. You don't get this in rehearsed speech.
*HEDGING where he doesn't sound quite sure about what he is saying. He says 'sort of' and 'kinda' a lot.
*IMPERATIVES. This EXTRACT is a bit more forceful and he gives orders to the listners (Go get some). This might be more of a reflection of his personality
*Really informal in parts, might make it sound less professional (SOrt of, kinda, builders mug, you can DO rice etc)
*No real DISCOURSE MARKERS. Instead, he keeps saying 'So...' which is repetitive and shows that he hasn't really planned what he is going to say.
*DOes use some metaphors like 'Arsenal and 'secret weapon' and 'another planet' which show signs of rehearsal
*At other times he OVER USES words such as GORGEOUS showing that he can't think what to say as he is under pressure.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION - Like in the first extract (We're gathered here today)
*LOTS OF INFORMAL LANGUAGE - (gotta, kinda etc) These are part of Jamie Oliver's Sociolect but they show that he is less rehearsed and is talking more like he would talk to his friends rather than acting really professional.
*LOTS OF 'SOCIOLECT' TYPE WORDS. Just like in Extract ONE, Jamie Oliver uses words which make him likeable to his target audience (Gnarly, vibe)
*Still lots of empty adjectives (Gorgeous, exciting, beautiful)
*Bits of text which don't really make sense or their grammar is bad (So of course, how can you do it in 15 minutes). This just shows that people do make mistakes when they are not rehearsed.
*Jamie Oliver is a bit more obvious when talking to his target audience. He actually says 'I have written this for people on the go'. This might still be effective but is less well thought out than EXTRACT ONE.
*REPEATS PARTS OF THE VOICEOVER - He actually repeats the 'bi flavours, fast' bit, as if it is stuck in his head or he can't think of anything original to say.
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THIRD IMPORTANT THING TO READ - EXTRACT ONE
In extract one, there are many language features which have been deliberately included in order to HOOK THE AUDIENCE and make them want to watch the rest of the series.
These features include:
*Use of PERSONAL PRONOUNS (You, Your) to make you feel like you're being spoken to personally.
*Lots of very elaborate ADJECTIVES to make things sound more interesting. (Lip-Smacking, Delicious)
*Lots of ALLITERATION to make things sound more rehearsed and stand out more. (Mighty Meatballs, Multi-tasking to the Max, big flavours, fast)
*RULE OF THREE, to give the text a more professional and memorable feel. (healthy, gorgeous and super-quick...delicious, nutritious, super-fast food)
*EMOTIVE LANGUAGE to appeal to the target audience. (you can create magic)
*REPETITION of key words such as HEALTHY to appeal to the target audience.
*DISCOURSE MARKERS such as 'Today' and 'Next' to give the speech order/ make it easy to follow.
*INCLUSIVE PRONOUNS such as 'We' to make it sound like we all agree with Jamie Oliver.
*PAUSES put in deliberately at the end of subjects in order to avoid confusion and to allow for pictures demonstrating what he has just said.
*EMPTY ADJECTIVES such as 'gorgeous', 'super' and 'amazing'. All of these are part of the way Jamie Oliver communicates - his SOCIOLECT - and this is part of what makes him popular.
*HUMOUR - My Mighty Meatballs.
*RHYME - Delicious, nutritious - to make Key Words stand out.
*METAPHORS - You can create MAGIC in the kitchen, to make the quite boring task sound more fun.
*JARGON to do with working out in order to make it sound more appealing to the Target Audience.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION where Jamie Oliver makes you feel like you've been personally spoken to or welcomed (Welcome to the 15 minute mind-set).
There is absolutely TONS there folks. Far more than you need. Have a look at your text and pick out the ones you think are most important, and I'll talk you through EXTRACT TWO on the next post. Sorry it's taking a while, I can hardly see out of one eye!
Mr Williams.
These features include:
*Use of PERSONAL PRONOUNS (You, Your) to make you feel like you're being spoken to personally.
*Lots of very elaborate ADJECTIVES to make things sound more interesting. (Lip-Smacking, Delicious)
*Lots of ALLITERATION to make things sound more rehearsed and stand out more. (Mighty Meatballs, Multi-tasking to the Max, big flavours, fast)
*RULE OF THREE, to give the text a more professional and memorable feel. (healthy, gorgeous and super-quick...delicious, nutritious, super-fast food)
*EMOTIVE LANGUAGE to appeal to the target audience. (you can create magic)
*REPETITION of key words such as HEALTHY to appeal to the target audience.
*DISCOURSE MARKERS such as 'Today' and 'Next' to give the speech order/ make it easy to follow.
*INCLUSIVE PRONOUNS such as 'We' to make it sound like we all agree with Jamie Oliver.
*PAUSES put in deliberately at the end of subjects in order to avoid confusion and to allow for pictures demonstrating what he has just said.
*EMPTY ADJECTIVES such as 'gorgeous', 'super' and 'amazing'. All of these are part of the way Jamie Oliver communicates - his SOCIOLECT - and this is part of what makes him popular.
*HUMOUR - My Mighty Meatballs.
*RHYME - Delicious, nutritious - to make Key Words stand out.
*METAPHORS - You can create MAGIC in the kitchen, to make the quite boring task sound more fun.
*JARGON to do with working out in order to make it sound more appealing to the Target Audience.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION where Jamie Oliver makes you feel like you've been personally spoken to or welcomed (Welcome to the 15 minute mind-set).
There is absolutely TONS there folks. Far more than you need. Have a look at your text and pick out the ones you think are most important, and I'll talk you through EXTRACT TWO on the next post. Sorry it's taking a while, I can hardly see out of one eye!
Mr Williams.
SECOND IMPORTANT THING TO READ
The first thing I am going to do is to show you a whole list of points which you could make about the FIRST EXTRACT.
However, before I do, have a quick read of this guide which tells you HOW TO MAKE YOUR PARAGRAPHS!
HOW TO WRITE YOUR PARAGRAPHS:
Of all of your controlled assessments, this one is probably the easiest. All you are doing is finding SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES between the two extracts.
So here is what your paragraphs should look like:
*Tell me one thing which you noticed in extract one
*Show me the actual example (or examples) of where you saw it.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
*Tell me if this is similar or different to extract two
*Show me an example of something SIMILAR or DIFFERENT in extract two.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
And that is it! If you do that about 8-10 times after your introduction, you'll have a brilliant essay.
So now let's have a look at the points we can make!
However, before I do, have a quick read of this guide which tells you HOW TO MAKE YOUR PARAGRAPHS!
HOW TO WRITE YOUR PARAGRAPHS:
Of all of your controlled assessments, this one is probably the easiest. All you are doing is finding SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES between the two extracts.
So here is what your paragraphs should look like:
*Tell me one thing which you noticed in extract one
*Show me the actual example (or examples) of where you saw it.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
*Tell me if this is similar or different to extract two
*Show me an example of something SIMILAR or DIFFERENT in extract two.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
And that is it! If you do that about 8-10 times after your introduction, you'll have a brilliant essay.
So now let's have a look at the points we can make!
FIRST IMPORTANT THING TO READ
Ok everyone,
Read all of the following. Make sure you understand it and then move on to the next bit. If you do that, you'll be fine.
Rehearsed vs Unreheased speech.
Transcript 1.
What we have been looking at are two examples of speech from the same person: Jamie Oliver. However, there is a big difference between the two. The first TRANSCRIPT is taken from a voiceover at THE START OF THE VERY FIRST (PILOT) EPISODE OF his new TV show, 'Jamie's 15 Minute Meals.'
This transcript is:
*Totally scripted and rehearsed.
*Practiced many times.
*Probably filmed many times to make sure there are no mistakes.
*Full of well thought out language which makes it sound more interesting, fun, relevant and informative.
When people have time to rehearse, they are able to do this because they realise that language is very important. Choosing the right words or phrases can make a difference between a boring piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE or an interesting piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE.
In the first transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM: This is the first episode of a brand new series. They want to make it sound as interesting as possible, otherwise people may not tune in for the rest of the series.
The last thing you need to keep in mind about this is that the show has a very specific TARGET AUDIENCE. The show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
Transcript 2.
The second TRANSCRIPT is taken from the same show, but it is a section of LIVE SPOKEN LANGAUGE, where Jamie Oliver is speaking to the camera whilst he is busy cooking.
This transcript is:
*Probably only partially scripted - much of it will be NATURAL speech - made up on the spot
*Not really practiced.
*Filmed in more of a hurry - they can't do too many takes when they are cooking food!
*Full of more natural features of SPOKEN LANGUAGE that we all make every day. These will include:
*Mistakes
*FILLERS - Such as 'er', 'erm', 'um' etc.
*HEDGING - Which is where someone might sound a bit unsure about what they're saying (you could perhaps put some olive oil in)
*Unintentional Pauses - where he is trying to think what to say next.
*Repeated words.
*Wrong words, or words that don't make sense.
*ANY MANY OTHERS!
When people don't have time to rehearse, they often make mistakes or make language choices which are imperfect. We do this ALL THE TIME, EVERYDAY, but we often don't realise the amount of mistakes we make until we see them written down on paper.
In the second transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM, but it is different to the first one: Jamie Oliver is cooking food and is trying to talk the viewers through the process, whilst also attempting to keep them entertained. In an UNREHEARSED SITUATION, this is a very difficult task to do.
The TARGET AUDIENCE for this transcript will be exactly the same, however, you may find that the language here is NOT AS EFFECTIVE, because Jamie Oliver has not had the same amount of time and planning to choose his language so carefully. There will still be SOME GOOD FEATURES, but these will be joined by MANY MISTAKES too.
Remember, the show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
ONCE YOU HAVE READ AND UNDERSTOOD ALL OF THE ABOVE, YOU SHOULD MOVE ON TO THE NEXT BLOG POST WHICH WILL TALK YOU THROUGH TRANSCRIPT ONE IN DETAIL.
Mr Williams
Read all of the following. Make sure you understand it and then move on to the next bit. If you do that, you'll be fine.
Rehearsed vs Unreheased speech.
Transcript 1.
What we have been looking at are two examples of speech from the same person: Jamie Oliver. However, there is a big difference between the two. The first TRANSCRIPT is taken from a voiceover at THE START OF THE VERY FIRST (PILOT) EPISODE OF his new TV show, 'Jamie's 15 Minute Meals.'
This transcript is:
*Totally scripted and rehearsed.
*Practiced many times.
*Probably filmed many times to make sure there are no mistakes.
*Full of well thought out language which makes it sound more interesting, fun, relevant and informative.
When people have time to rehearse, they are able to do this because they realise that language is very important. Choosing the right words or phrases can make a difference between a boring piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE or an interesting piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE.
In the first transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM: This is the first episode of a brand new series. They want to make it sound as interesting as possible, otherwise people may not tune in for the rest of the series.
The last thing you need to keep in mind about this is that the show has a very specific TARGET AUDIENCE. The show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
Transcript 2.
The second TRANSCRIPT is taken from the same show, but it is a section of LIVE SPOKEN LANGAUGE, where Jamie Oliver is speaking to the camera whilst he is busy cooking.
This transcript is:
*Probably only partially scripted - much of it will be NATURAL speech - made up on the spot
*Not really practiced.
*Filmed in more of a hurry - they can't do too many takes when they are cooking food!
*Full of more natural features of SPOKEN LANGUAGE that we all make every day. These will include:
*Mistakes
*FILLERS - Such as 'er', 'erm', 'um' etc.
*HEDGING - Which is where someone might sound a bit unsure about what they're saying (you could perhaps put some olive oil in)
*Unintentional Pauses - where he is trying to think what to say next.
*Repeated words.
*Wrong words, or words that don't make sense.
*ANY MANY OTHERS!
When people don't have time to rehearse, they often make mistakes or make language choices which are imperfect. We do this ALL THE TIME, EVERYDAY, but we often don't realise the amount of mistakes we make until we see them written down on paper.
In the second transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM, but it is different to the first one: Jamie Oliver is cooking food and is trying to talk the viewers through the process, whilst also attempting to keep them entertained. In an UNREHEARSED SITUATION, this is a very difficult task to do.
The TARGET AUDIENCE for this transcript will be exactly the same, however, you may find that the language here is NOT AS EFFECTIVE, because Jamie Oliver has not had the same amount of time and planning to choose his language so carefully. There will still be SOME GOOD FEATURES, but these will be joined by MANY MISTAKES too.
Remember, the show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
ONCE YOU HAVE READ AND UNDERSTOOD ALL OF THE ABOVE, YOU SHOULD MOVE ON TO THE NEXT BLOG POST WHICH WILL TALK YOU THROUGH TRANSCRIPT ONE IN DETAIL.
Mr Williams
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Hi everyone,
I will be online for the next couple of hours from now, so stay tuned.
Mr Williams
I will be online for the next couple of hours from now, so stay tuned.
Mr Williams
DO NOT PANIC!
Good afternoon class,
I am making this blog to ensure that every single one of you feels comfortable doing you controlled assessment tomorrow. If you READ AND UNDERSTAND everything that I put on this blog in the next hour or so, then you will be well prepared.
So, by around 5pm, I will have added everything you need in order to complete the test. Just read and follow everything, and you'll be fine.
Do not panic,
Mr Williams
I am making this blog to ensure that every single one of you feels comfortable doing you controlled assessment tomorrow. If you READ AND UNDERSTAND everything that I put on this blog in the next hour or so, then you will be well prepared.
So, by around 5pm, I will have added everything you need in order to complete the test. Just read and follow everything, and you'll be fine.
Do not panic,
Mr Williams
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