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Monday, 4 November 2013
READ THIS POWERPOINT!!!
If you read nothing else for the writing section, make sure you read THIS WHOLE POWERPOINT.
IT WILL REALLY HELP YOU!!!
(I made it)
Writing Powerpoint
VERY VERY IMPORTANT.
Good luck everyone,
NW
IT WILL REALLY HELP YOU!!!
(I made it)
Writing Powerpoint
VERY VERY IMPORTANT.
Good luck everyone,
NW
Making Sure you don't run out of IDEAS in your WRITING TASKS.
If you think you're going to run out of ideas, here are some ideas of things you could include in your writing tasks:
Shorter task - Inform/Describe
*Use a story or anecdote to talk about one aspect of it.
*Use your senses to describe what you can feel/hear/smell etc
*Use extended descriptive language to add more detail - personifications, metaphors, similes etc.
* Use a TELESCOPE method:
In the Telescope method, you start off by describing something 'zoomed out'and then you gradually zoom in with each paragraph. For example:
P1. - You describe a whole forest in detail
P2. - You describe a single tree in detail
P3. - You describe a branch in detail
P4 - You describe a bird's nest on the end of the branch in detail.
OR
P1 - You describe a school building
P2 - You describe one of the classrooms
P3 - You describe and argument in the classroom
P4 - You describe the look on somebody's face as the argument takes place.
Get it?
Longer Task - Argue/Persuade
Make sure you order your writing by pre-planning lots of well thought out reasons.
If you can't think what to add, try the following:
*Anecdotes/stories
*Interviews
*Surveys with the public
*Quotes from experts (which you can just make up)
*An emotional speech about your honest feelings.
*A flattering speech towards the person you're speaking to.
Hope this helps
NW
Shorter task - Inform/Describe
*Use a story or anecdote to talk about one aspect of it.
*Use your senses to describe what you can feel/hear/smell etc
*Use extended descriptive language to add more detail - personifications, metaphors, similes etc.
* Use a TELESCOPE method:
In the Telescope method, you start off by describing something 'zoomed out'and then you gradually zoom in with each paragraph. For example:
P1. - You describe a whole forest in detail
P2. - You describe a single tree in detail
P3. - You describe a branch in detail
P4 - You describe a bird's nest on the end of the branch in detail.
OR
P1 - You describe a school building
P2 - You describe one of the classrooms
P3 - You describe and argument in the classroom
P4 - You describe the look on somebody's face as the argument takes place.
Get it?
Longer Task - Argue/Persuade
Make sure you order your writing by pre-planning lots of well thought out reasons.
If you can't think what to add, try the following:
*Anecdotes/stories
*Interviews
*Surveys with the public
*Quotes from experts (which you can just make up)
*An emotional speech about your honest feelings.
*A flattering speech towards the person you're speaking to.
Hope this helps
NW
Planning your writing tasks.
Making sure you have enough to write is all down to your planning.
Before you start writing, use a hairy spider diagram. Like this...
Before you start writing, use a hairy spider diagram. Like this...
Each leg is a paragraph and each hair on the leg is an idea of something you could include. You'll need about 6 paragraphs for the shorter task and about 8 for the longer one!
Question 4 - The COMPARE question (Presentational features)
Right everyone,
I genuinely believe that this is the easiest of the reading questions. The way you write your paragraphs is slightly more complicated, but the skills you need are really not very tough at all.
Firstly, consult your 'How to get your C' booklet that I gave you earlier. It has a full list of presentational features which you should be looking out for: Pictures, Diagrams, Colours, Layout, Headings, Subheadings, Logos, Links, Adverts, Fonts etc.
All you have to do is compare about 6 of those between TWO of the texts.
Here is how you should set out your paragraphs:
Here is an example answer for the same exam paper I showed you earlier.
The question is:
I have chosen source …1… and …2...
compare the way they look.
Here is my example answer:
Paragraph 1
The first way that I would like to compare the two texts is the way they use pictures. In text one, the picture is very effective because it shows the actor Johnny Depp, and the reaction of the girl who he came to visit. They both look very happy. This is effective because the target audience will want to read the article when they see the clear view of a famous actor's face. Also, the fact that it shows the girl looking very happy will make the article seem more interesting as people will wonder why such a famous character has visited a school. On the other hand, the use of pictures in text 2 is a little bit better. In this picture, the photographer has caught a rescue rope being thrown mid-air. His makes it almost feel as if the rescue is happening as we speak! This will make readers want to read more quickly to get all the details.
Paragraph 2
The second way in which we could compare the two texts is through their use of colour. In text 2, the background is mainly blue, and a lot of orange is also used. This is useful for two reasons. Firstly, the use of the colour blue is important as it reminds us of water, which is where more of the rescues take place. Also, orange and blue are the colours of the RNLI so it will remind the readers which charity they are reading about. On the other hand, text 1 does not really use the same use of colour. The text is almost entirely black and white. This is appropriate as it will remind readers of a newspaper, so the target audience of adult age will associate this text with the news. The word 'Online' is written in blue to make it stand out and to make readers realise that this is a web based version of the newspaper. Text 2 is much better because it uses much more imaginative use of colour.
Paragraph 3
The third way I would like to compare the texts is the way they use fonts. Text 1 uses quite a basic font that we would expect in a newspaper. This reminds us of the type of text we are reading. The word 'Mail' is written in a really old-fashioned font which makes us think that the newspaper is very old. This might make us respect the newspaper more. In text two it uses basic fonts throughout. Even though this is a bit boring, it is still quite effective because it makes it easy to follow and read for anybody who is interested in the event. The writing is in blue to remind us that it is a water rescue.
That is the kind of thing you should be doing. Just try to write about SIX paragraphs instead of just THREE!
Stay tuned, I'll add some WRITING help now.
NW
I genuinely believe that this is the easiest of the reading questions. The way you write your paragraphs is slightly more complicated, but the skills you need are really not very tough at all.
Firstly, consult your 'How to get your C' booklet that I gave you earlier. It has a full list of presentational features which you should be looking out for: Pictures, Diagrams, Colours, Layout, Headings, Subheadings, Logos, Links, Adverts, Fonts etc.
All you have to do is compare about 6 of those between TWO of the texts.
Here is how you should set out your paragraphs:
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What presentational feature are you
going to talk about? (eg, use of pictures)
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Why is this good in text 1?
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What is good or effective about this?
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What will this make the target audience
think?
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Now tell me about the same feature
(pictures) in text two
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What is good or effective about it?
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What will this make the target audience
think?
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Which is better and why?
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Here is an example answer for the same exam paper I showed you earlier.
The question is:
Choose two of the three sources and compare the way that both texts use
presentational features for effect.
I have chosen source …1… and …2...
Remember to:
write about the way the sources are presented
explain the effect of the presentational features
compare the way they look.
Here is my example answer:
Paragraph 1
The first way that I would like to compare the two texts is the way they use pictures. In text one, the picture is very effective because it shows the actor Johnny Depp, and the reaction of the girl who he came to visit. They both look very happy. This is effective because the target audience will want to read the article when they see the clear view of a famous actor's face. Also, the fact that it shows the girl looking very happy will make the article seem more interesting as people will wonder why such a famous character has visited a school. On the other hand, the use of pictures in text 2 is a little bit better. In this picture, the photographer has caught a rescue rope being thrown mid-air. His makes it almost feel as if the rescue is happening as we speak! This will make readers want to read more quickly to get all the details.
Paragraph 2
The second way in which we could compare the two texts is through their use of colour. In text 2, the background is mainly blue, and a lot of orange is also used. This is useful for two reasons. Firstly, the use of the colour blue is important as it reminds us of water, which is where more of the rescues take place. Also, orange and blue are the colours of the RNLI so it will remind the readers which charity they are reading about. On the other hand, text 1 does not really use the same use of colour. The text is almost entirely black and white. This is appropriate as it will remind readers of a newspaper, so the target audience of adult age will associate this text with the news. The word 'Online' is written in blue to make it stand out and to make readers realise that this is a web based version of the newspaper. Text 2 is much better because it uses much more imaginative use of colour.
Paragraph 3
The third way I would like to compare the texts is the way they use fonts. Text 1 uses quite a basic font that we would expect in a newspaper. This reminds us of the type of text we are reading. The word 'Mail' is written in a really old-fashioned font which makes us think that the newspaper is very old. This might make us respect the newspaper more. In text two it uses basic fonts throughout. Even though this is a bit boring, it is still quite effective because it makes it easy to follow and read for anybody who is interested in the event. The writing is in blue to remind us that it is a water rescue.
That is the kind of thing you should be doing. Just try to write about SIX paragraphs instead of just THREE!
Stay tuned, I'll add some WRITING help now.
NW
Question 3 - The Language Question.
Right everyone, let's just go over how to answer Question 3 on the foundation paper once more. On your hand-out I've given you a big list of Language/Language features. It doesn't matter which one it says, it means the same thing.
Here is how you should formulate your answer:
Remember, you need to write around 6 paragraphs to answer this one. You need to GRAB YOUR HIGHLIGHTER and highlight as many LANGUAGE FEATURES as you can find from the list I gave you.
If you get into the exam and you can't see many, then just use as you evidence any interesting or attention grabbing words or phrases.
Then, this is how you formulate your paragraphs:
Or, in other words:
Here is an example of a full answer based on the exam paper I posted the other day:
Question Paper
Sources
Here's the question: -
Remember to:
explain the effects.
And here's my answer:
Inform
The first way that the author uses language to inform is where he uses DISCOURSE MARKERS. We see this in a couple of places, firstly where it says 'Sunday afternoon', and also where it says, 'suddenly'. Discourse markers help to put the text in order. By using them, the author lets his reader know what order everything is happening in.
The second way that the author uses language to inform is through REPETITION. We see this when twice he tells us the name of the ship, the 'Al Sharma'. Repeating the name helps the name to stick in our heads. This makes the setting seem more realistic and will stick in the heads of any readers who might want to find out more about the boat.
Another way in which the author uses language to inform is by using RULE OF THREE. We see this where it says, 'This crew has given up a lot for us - sleeping space, living space and precious water.' By putting things into threes like this, it makes them stand out. This will make the reader realise just how much sacrifice the crew members have made on this journey.
One way in which the author uses language to describe is by using alliteration. We see this where it says, 'the reassuring rumble of the engine'. Alliteration helps you to imagine sounds. Here, the alliteration helps the reader to imagine the sound of the engine and makes it seem more realistic.
Another way in which the author uses language to describe is by using quotations from other people. We see this where it says, 'We are lucky men' he says. This is a really important technique because using quotations adds a sense of realism to the text. Also, it gives us a sense of how lucky the men are to still be alive.
Are you getting the hang of it now? It really is that easy. Just name the language feature, give an example, and say WHY it is good. Just make sure you're answering any bullet points you are given.
Next, I'll talk about question 4...
NW
Here is how you should formulate your answer:
Remember, you need to write around 6 paragraphs to answer this one. You need to GRAB YOUR HIGHLIGHTER and highlight as many LANGUAGE FEATURES as you can find from the list I gave you.
If you get into the exam and you can't see many, then just use as you evidence any interesting or attention grabbing words or phrases.
Then, this is how you formulate your paragraphs:
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What is the language feature you have
spotted?
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Where can we see it?
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What is good or effective about this?
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What will this do for the target
audience?
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Or, in other words:
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The first wat that the author has used language is by using alliteration.
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We can see this where it says, "Bright, blinding bulbs"
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Alliteration is good because it makes particular words stand out.
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This will make the target audience feel excited about the show because t makes the lights sound more impressive.
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Here is an example of a full answer based on the exam paper I posted the other day:
Question Paper
Sources
Here's the question: -
How does the writer use language features to inform the reader about his trip and to describe his experiences?
give some examples of language features to inform
give some examples of language features to describe
explain the effects.
And here's my answer:
Inform
The first way that the author uses language to inform is where he uses DISCOURSE MARKERS. We see this in a couple of places, firstly where it says 'Sunday afternoon', and also where it says, 'suddenly'. Discourse markers help to put the text in order. By using them, the author lets his reader know what order everything is happening in.
The second way that the author uses language to inform is through REPETITION. We see this when twice he tells us the name of the ship, the 'Al Sharma'. Repeating the name helps the name to stick in our heads. This makes the setting seem more realistic and will stick in the heads of any readers who might want to find out more about the boat.
Another way in which the author uses language to inform is by using RULE OF THREE. We see this where it says, 'This crew has given up a lot for us - sleeping space, living space and precious water.' By putting things into threes like this, it makes them stand out. This will make the reader realise just how much sacrifice the crew members have made on this journey.
One way in which the author uses language to describe is by using alliteration. We see this where it says, 'the reassuring rumble of the engine'. Alliteration helps you to imagine sounds. Here, the alliteration helps the reader to imagine the sound of the engine and makes it seem more realistic.
Another way in which the author uses language to describe is by using quotations from other people. We see this where it says, 'We are lucky men' he says. This is a really important technique because using quotations adds a sense of realism to the text. Also, it gives us a sense of how lucky the men are to still be alive.
Are you getting the hang of it now? It really is that easy. Just name the language feature, give an example, and say WHY it is good. Just make sure you're answering any bullet points you are given.
Next, I'll talk about question 4...
NW
Hi everyone
It took me a little while longer to get home than I thought it would. I will get stuff on now. Should all be on here by 7.30 so you can spend a good amount of time revising. Just follow everything on here and you'll be fine!
NW
NW
Sunday, 3 November 2013
Updates today.
Right everyone,
I've just checked and still no one is really viewing the blog so I will devote my time to making a booklet and resources for tomorrow. I'll see you lunch time and after school, and I'll try to get you out of 1 lesson in the afternoon also.
For now, practice the writing questions from the paper I blogged yesterday and revise question 1 techniques.
We will cover the other 3 questions tomorrow!
NW
I've just checked and still no one is really viewing the blog so I will devote my time to making a booklet and resources for tomorrow. I'll see you lunch time and after school, and I'll try to get you out of 1 lesson in the afternoon also.
For now, practice the writing questions from the paper I blogged yesterday and revise question 1 techniques.
We will cover the other 3 questions tomorrow!
NW
Saturday, 2 November 2013
Until Tomorrow.
Ok everyone,
I've put a few bits on, but will be able to put a lot more on tomorrow. At the moment it appears that no one is viewing the blog anyway, so I will assume you are getting ready for Halloween parties or something and I'll add the rest of the stuff tomorrow morning/early afternoon.
Mr W
I've put a few bits on, but will be able to put a lot more on tomorrow. At the moment it appears that no one is viewing the blog anyway, so I will assume you are getting ready for Halloween parties or something and I'll add the rest of the stuff tomorrow morning/early afternoon.
Mr W
Foundation Question 1 Examples
For Question 1 (a) - 4 marks.
This really could not be simpler. Whatever the question asks you, you simply go through the text with a highlighter and highlight what you need to know.
THis question asks you to list 4 things you learn about Johnny Depp. ALL YOU NEED TO DO is to highlight four things you learn (there are loads) and copy them down.
So you could have:
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fourth Pirates Of The Caribbean movie
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Beatrice Delap
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from a third-fl oor window
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In the movie, Johnny stars alongside Penelope Cruz,
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saving his daughter's life,
Any of those are fine. Copy down the EXACT quote. DO NOT try to put it into your own words.
For section (b) of this question, you need to say what was unusual about the visit. The way you do this is to find about 3 or 4 things that are unusual and then write your paragraphs like this:
The first thing which we learn that is unusual is that, "Quote". This is unusual because...EXPLAIN WHY IN YOUR OWN WORDS...
For example:
The first thing we learn which is unusual is that Johnny Depp turned up, 'dressed as Jack Sparrow'. This is unusual because it would be very strange for the students sitting in school to see a famous movie character appear at the door.
The second thing we learn which is interesting is that he made a 'one off trip' to see the girl. This is interesting and unusual because it shows that he went to a lot of effort to visit her, which is unusual for such a big celebrity.
The third thing we learn which is unusual is that 'the school was told just ten minutes before the visit'. This is interesting because it makes us realise how surprised everybody at the school must have been having that sprung on them.
The fourth thing we learn....
etc etc etc.
This really could not be simpler. Whatever the question asks you, you simply go through the text with a highlighter and highlight what you need to know.
THis question asks you to list 4 things you learn about Johnny Depp. ALL YOU NEED TO DO is to highlight four things you learn (there are loads) and copy them down.
So you could have:
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The star is currently in south-east London fi lming the
fourth Pirates Of The Caribbean movie
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He made the one-off trip after nine-year-old pupil
Beatrice Delap
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Depp has been seen fi lming scenes in which he jumped
from a third-fl oor window
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In the movie, Johnny stars alongside Penelope Cruz,
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Johnny has got form when it comes to fl ying visits to fans
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He made a secret visit to Great Ormond Street Hospital
in January 2008 to donate £1 million to say thank you for
Any of those are fine. Copy down the EXACT quote. DO NOT try to put it into your own words.
For section (b) of this question, you need to say what was unusual about the visit. The way you do this is to find about 3 or 4 things that are unusual and then write your paragraphs like this:
The first thing which we learn that is unusual is that, "Quote". This is unusual because...EXPLAIN WHY IN YOUR OWN WORDS...
For example:
The first thing we learn which is unusual is that Johnny Depp turned up, 'dressed as Jack Sparrow'. This is unusual because it would be very strange for the students sitting in school to see a famous movie character appear at the door.
The second thing we learn which is interesting is that he made a 'one off trip' to see the girl. This is interesting and unusual because it shows that he went to a lot of effort to visit her, which is unusual for such a big celebrity.
The third thing we learn which is unusual is that 'the school was told just ten minutes before the visit'. This is interesting because it makes us realise how surprised everybody at the school must have been having that sprung on them.
The fourth thing we learn....
etc etc etc.
FOR TODAY:
I AM GOING TO GIVE YOU SOME ADVICE WITH THE WRITING SECTION:
As you know, there are TWO questions in the writing section.
You MUST do both, and you MUST spend more time on question 6 as it is worth more marks.
One of the questions will ask you to ARGUE or PERSUADE
The other will ask you to INFORM or DESCRIBE
Have a look at this Powerpoint. It should help you with your writing tasks. I will give you more specific advice tomorrow.
How to do brilliantly in the writing tasks.
As you know, there are TWO questions in the writing section.
You MUST do both, and you MUST spend more time on question 6 as it is worth more marks.
One of the questions will ask you to ARGUE or PERSUADE
The other will ask you to INFORM or DESCRIBE
Have a look at this Powerpoint. It should help you with your writing tasks. I will give you more specific advice tomorrow.
How to do brilliantly in the writing tasks.
The layout of the exams
As you should all know, here are the questions you have to face in each exam, and how much time you should be devoting to each question:
Foundation Paper
Time - 2hrs 15mins
Section A - Spend 15 mins reading and 1 hr answering all the questions.
Question 1 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 2 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 3 - 12 marks - 18 minutes
Question 4 - 12 Marks - 18 minutes
Section B - Spend 25 minutes on question 5, and 35 minutes on question 6.
Question 5 - 16 marks - 5 minutes planning/ 20 writing
Question 6 - 24 marks - 5minutes planning/ 30 writing
Higher Paper
Time - 2hrs 15mins
Section A - Spend 15 mins reading and 1 hr answering all the questions.
Question 1 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 2 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 3 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 4 - 16 Marks - 24 minutes
Section B - Spend 25 minutes on question 5, and 35 minutes on question 6.
Question 5 - 16 marks - 5 minutes planning/ 20 writing
Question 6 - 24 marks - 5minutes planning/ 30 writing
IT IS ABSOLUTELY ESSENTIAL THAT YOU STICK TO THESE TIMINGS. IF YOU LEAVE OUT ANY QUESTION, OR DO NOT SPEND ENOUGH TIME ON IT, YOU MAY AS WELL NOT ATTEMPT THE EXAM. YOU NEED TO SCORE WELL IN EVERY QUESTION PASS.
Foundation Paper
Time - 2hrs 15mins
Section A - Spend 15 mins reading and 1 hr answering all the questions.
Question 1 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 2 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 3 - 12 marks - 18 minutes
Question 4 - 12 Marks - 18 minutes
Section B - Spend 25 minutes on question 5, and 35 minutes on question 6.
Question 5 - 16 marks - 5 minutes planning/ 20 writing
Question 6 - 24 marks - 5minutes planning/ 30 writing
Higher Paper
Time - 2hrs 15mins
Section A - Spend 15 mins reading and 1 hr answering all the questions.
Question 1 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 2 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 3 - 8 marks - 12 minutes
Question 4 - 16 Marks - 24 minutes
Section B - Spend 25 minutes on question 5, and 35 minutes on question 6.
Question 5 - 16 marks - 5 minutes planning/ 20 writing
Question 6 - 24 marks - 5minutes planning/ 30 writing
IT IS ABSOLUTELY ESSENTIAL THAT YOU STICK TO THESE TIMINGS. IF YOU LEAVE OUT ANY QUESTION, OR DO NOT SPEND ENOUGH TIME ON IT, YOU MAY AS WELL NOT ATTEMPT THE EXAM. YOU NEED TO SCORE WELL IN EVERY QUESTION PASS.
Megan, Faye, Hannah, Sophie and Liam - Stay Tuned!
You are the FIVE people from our class who are sitting your exam on Tuesday. You need to make sure that you follow what I ask you to do over the next couple of days. That way, you will be well prepared for your exam.
I will be on here until about 3.30 today, and then I will add a load more stuff before about mid-day tomorrow.
Stay Tuned!
Mr W
I will be on here until about 3.30 today, and then I will add a load more stuff before about mid-day tomorrow.
Stay Tuned!
Mr W
Monday, 14 October 2013
And that's it!
All you need to do is write an introduction where you talk about/ introduce each text and talk about why they are so different.
Then write about 8-10 paragraphs pointing out SIMILARITIES OR DIFFERENCES, always making sure you say WHY each language feature happens, and how that will affect the audience.
Then a quick conclusion saying which one was better and why.
And you're done!
You'll have blank sheets in the exam, so just make some brief notes and plans on your notes sheet to take in with you. I would recommend starting off talking about how they are similar and then move onto differences.
Good luck,
Mr Williams.
Then write about 8-10 paragraphs pointing out SIMILARITIES OR DIFFERENCES, always making sure you say WHY each language feature happens, and how that will affect the audience.
Then a quick conclusion saying which one was better and why.
And you're done!
You'll have blank sheets in the exam, so just make some brief notes and plans on your notes sheet to take in with you. I would recommend starting off talking about how they are similar and then move onto differences.
Good luck,
Mr Williams.
FOURTH IMPORTANT THING TO READ - EXTRACT TWO
As you will see from reading it, the second extract is totally different. It contains many features which are not seen in the first extract, but also a few that are so there are SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES.
Some of the features we see in EXTRACT TWO are:
*NON-INTENTIONAL or ACCIDENTAL PAUSES, shown by a '(.)' symbol. This shows that Jamie Oliver is trying to buy himself time or trying to think what to say next. This is what people do in real life - but it makes the extract sound less smooth than the first one.
*Lots of fillers such as 'er' which is where he is trying to think of things to say. Possibly this is where he is busy moving pans and so is not quite concentrating on what he is saying. You don't get this in rehearsed speech.
*HEDGING where he doesn't sound quite sure about what he is saying. He says 'sort of' and 'kinda' a lot.
*IMPERATIVES. This EXTRACT is a bit more forceful and he gives orders to the listners (Go get some). This might be more of a reflection of his personality
*Really informal in parts, might make it sound less professional (SOrt of, kinda, builders mug, you can DO rice etc)
*No real DISCOURSE MARKERS. Instead, he keeps saying 'So...' which is repetitive and shows that he hasn't really planned what he is going to say.
*DOes use some metaphors like 'Arsenal and 'secret weapon' and 'another planet' which show signs of rehearsal
*At other times he OVER USES words such as GORGEOUS showing that he can't think what to say as he is under pressure.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION - Like in the first extract (We're gathered here today)
*LOTS OF INFORMAL LANGUAGE - (gotta, kinda etc) These are part of Jamie Oliver's Sociolect but they show that he is less rehearsed and is talking more like he would talk to his friends rather than acting really professional.
*LOTS OF 'SOCIOLECT' TYPE WORDS. Just like in Extract ONE, Jamie Oliver uses words which make him likeable to his target audience (Gnarly, vibe)
*Still lots of empty adjectives (Gorgeous, exciting, beautiful)
*Bits of text which don't really make sense or their grammar is bad (So of course, how can you do it in 15 minutes). This just shows that people do make mistakes when they are not rehearsed.
*Jamie Oliver is a bit more obvious when talking to his target audience. He actually says 'I have written this for people on the go'. This might still be effective but is less well thought out than EXTRACT ONE.
*REPEATS PARTS OF THE VOICEOVER - He actually repeats the 'bi flavours, fast' bit, as if it is stuck in his head or he can't think of anything original to say.
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Some of the features we see in EXTRACT TWO are:
*NON-INTENTIONAL or ACCIDENTAL PAUSES, shown by a '(.)' symbol. This shows that Jamie Oliver is trying to buy himself time or trying to think what to say next. This is what people do in real life - but it makes the extract sound less smooth than the first one.
*Lots of fillers such as 'er' which is where he is trying to think of things to say. Possibly this is where he is busy moving pans and so is not quite concentrating on what he is saying. You don't get this in rehearsed speech.
*HEDGING where he doesn't sound quite sure about what he is saying. He says 'sort of' and 'kinda' a lot.
*IMPERATIVES. This EXTRACT is a bit more forceful and he gives orders to the listners (Go get some). This might be more of a reflection of his personality
*Really informal in parts, might make it sound less professional (SOrt of, kinda, builders mug, you can DO rice etc)
*No real DISCOURSE MARKERS. Instead, he keeps saying 'So...' which is repetitive and shows that he hasn't really planned what he is going to say.
*DOes use some metaphors like 'Arsenal and 'secret weapon' and 'another planet' which show signs of rehearsal
*At other times he OVER USES words such as GORGEOUS showing that he can't think what to say as he is under pressure.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION - Like in the first extract (We're gathered here today)
*LOTS OF INFORMAL LANGUAGE - (gotta, kinda etc) These are part of Jamie Oliver's Sociolect but they show that he is less rehearsed and is talking more like he would talk to his friends rather than acting really professional.
*LOTS OF 'SOCIOLECT' TYPE WORDS. Just like in Extract ONE, Jamie Oliver uses words which make him likeable to his target audience (Gnarly, vibe)
*Still lots of empty adjectives (Gorgeous, exciting, beautiful)
*Bits of text which don't really make sense or their grammar is bad (So of course, how can you do it in 15 minutes). This just shows that people do make mistakes when they are not rehearsed.
*Jamie Oliver is a bit more obvious when talking to his target audience. He actually says 'I have written this for people on the go'. This might still be effective but is less well thought out than EXTRACT ONE.
*REPEATS PARTS OF THE VOICEOVER - He actually repeats the 'bi flavours, fast' bit, as if it is stuck in his head or he can't think of anything original to say.
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THIRD IMPORTANT THING TO READ - EXTRACT ONE
In extract one, there are many language features which have been deliberately included in order to HOOK THE AUDIENCE and make them want to watch the rest of the series.
These features include:
*Use of PERSONAL PRONOUNS (You, Your) to make you feel like you're being spoken to personally.
*Lots of very elaborate ADJECTIVES to make things sound more interesting. (Lip-Smacking, Delicious)
*Lots of ALLITERATION to make things sound more rehearsed and stand out more. (Mighty Meatballs, Multi-tasking to the Max, big flavours, fast)
*RULE OF THREE, to give the text a more professional and memorable feel. (healthy, gorgeous and super-quick...delicious, nutritious, super-fast food)
*EMOTIVE LANGUAGE to appeal to the target audience. (you can create magic)
*REPETITION of key words such as HEALTHY to appeal to the target audience.
*DISCOURSE MARKERS such as 'Today' and 'Next' to give the speech order/ make it easy to follow.
*INCLUSIVE PRONOUNS such as 'We' to make it sound like we all agree with Jamie Oliver.
*PAUSES put in deliberately at the end of subjects in order to avoid confusion and to allow for pictures demonstrating what he has just said.
*EMPTY ADJECTIVES such as 'gorgeous', 'super' and 'amazing'. All of these are part of the way Jamie Oliver communicates - his SOCIOLECT - and this is part of what makes him popular.
*HUMOUR - My Mighty Meatballs.
*RHYME - Delicious, nutritious - to make Key Words stand out.
*METAPHORS - You can create MAGIC in the kitchen, to make the quite boring task sound more fun.
*JARGON to do with working out in order to make it sound more appealing to the Target Audience.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION where Jamie Oliver makes you feel like you've been personally spoken to or welcomed (Welcome to the 15 minute mind-set).
There is absolutely TONS there folks. Far more than you need. Have a look at your text and pick out the ones you think are most important, and I'll talk you through EXTRACT TWO on the next post. Sorry it's taking a while, I can hardly see out of one eye!
Mr Williams.
These features include:
*Use of PERSONAL PRONOUNS (You, Your) to make you feel like you're being spoken to personally.
*Lots of very elaborate ADJECTIVES to make things sound more interesting. (Lip-Smacking, Delicious)
*Lots of ALLITERATION to make things sound more rehearsed and stand out more. (Mighty Meatballs, Multi-tasking to the Max, big flavours, fast)
*RULE OF THREE, to give the text a more professional and memorable feel. (healthy, gorgeous and super-quick...delicious, nutritious, super-fast food)
*EMOTIVE LANGUAGE to appeal to the target audience. (you can create magic)
*REPETITION of key words such as HEALTHY to appeal to the target audience.
*DISCOURSE MARKERS such as 'Today' and 'Next' to give the speech order/ make it easy to follow.
*INCLUSIVE PRONOUNS such as 'We' to make it sound like we all agree with Jamie Oliver.
*PAUSES put in deliberately at the end of subjects in order to avoid confusion and to allow for pictures demonstrating what he has just said.
*EMPTY ADJECTIVES such as 'gorgeous', 'super' and 'amazing'. All of these are part of the way Jamie Oliver communicates - his SOCIOLECT - and this is part of what makes him popular.
*HUMOUR - My Mighty Meatballs.
*RHYME - Delicious, nutritious - to make Key Words stand out.
*METAPHORS - You can create MAGIC in the kitchen, to make the quite boring task sound more fun.
*JARGON to do with working out in order to make it sound more appealing to the Target Audience.
*SYNTHETIC PERSONALISATION where Jamie Oliver makes you feel like you've been personally spoken to or welcomed (Welcome to the 15 minute mind-set).
There is absolutely TONS there folks. Far more than you need. Have a look at your text and pick out the ones you think are most important, and I'll talk you through EXTRACT TWO on the next post. Sorry it's taking a while, I can hardly see out of one eye!
Mr Williams.
SECOND IMPORTANT THING TO READ
The first thing I am going to do is to show you a whole list of points which you could make about the FIRST EXTRACT.
However, before I do, have a quick read of this guide which tells you HOW TO MAKE YOUR PARAGRAPHS!
HOW TO WRITE YOUR PARAGRAPHS:
Of all of your controlled assessments, this one is probably the easiest. All you are doing is finding SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES between the two extracts.
So here is what your paragraphs should look like:
*Tell me one thing which you noticed in extract one
*Show me the actual example (or examples) of where you saw it.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
*Tell me if this is similar or different to extract two
*Show me an example of something SIMILAR or DIFFERENT in extract two.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
And that is it! If you do that about 8-10 times after your introduction, you'll have a brilliant essay.
So now let's have a look at the points we can make!
However, before I do, have a quick read of this guide which tells you HOW TO MAKE YOUR PARAGRAPHS!
HOW TO WRITE YOUR PARAGRAPHS:
Of all of your controlled assessments, this one is probably the easiest. All you are doing is finding SIMILARITIES AND DIFFERENCES between the two extracts.
So here is what your paragraphs should look like:
*Tell me one thing which you noticed in extract one
*Show me the actual example (or examples) of where you saw it.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
*Tell me if this is similar or different to extract two
*Show me an example of something SIMILAR or DIFFERENT in extract two.
*Tell me why this is found in the extract - give me a reason for it.
And that is it! If you do that about 8-10 times after your introduction, you'll have a brilliant essay.
So now let's have a look at the points we can make!
FIRST IMPORTANT THING TO READ
Ok everyone,
Read all of the following. Make sure you understand it and then move on to the next bit. If you do that, you'll be fine.
Rehearsed vs Unreheased speech.
Transcript 1.
What we have been looking at are two examples of speech from the same person: Jamie Oliver. However, there is a big difference between the two. The first TRANSCRIPT is taken from a voiceover at THE START OF THE VERY FIRST (PILOT) EPISODE OF his new TV show, 'Jamie's 15 Minute Meals.'
This transcript is:
*Totally scripted and rehearsed.
*Practiced many times.
*Probably filmed many times to make sure there are no mistakes.
*Full of well thought out language which makes it sound more interesting, fun, relevant and informative.
When people have time to rehearse, they are able to do this because they realise that language is very important. Choosing the right words or phrases can make a difference between a boring piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE or an interesting piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE.
In the first transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM: This is the first episode of a brand new series. They want to make it sound as interesting as possible, otherwise people may not tune in for the rest of the series.
The last thing you need to keep in mind about this is that the show has a very specific TARGET AUDIENCE. The show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
Transcript 2.
The second TRANSCRIPT is taken from the same show, but it is a section of LIVE SPOKEN LANGAUGE, where Jamie Oliver is speaking to the camera whilst he is busy cooking.
This transcript is:
*Probably only partially scripted - much of it will be NATURAL speech - made up on the spot
*Not really practiced.
*Filmed in more of a hurry - they can't do too many takes when they are cooking food!
*Full of more natural features of SPOKEN LANGUAGE that we all make every day. These will include:
*Mistakes
*FILLERS - Such as 'er', 'erm', 'um' etc.
*HEDGING - Which is where someone might sound a bit unsure about what they're saying (you could perhaps put some olive oil in)
*Unintentional Pauses - where he is trying to think what to say next.
*Repeated words.
*Wrong words, or words that don't make sense.
*ANY MANY OTHERS!
When people don't have time to rehearse, they often make mistakes or make language choices which are imperfect. We do this ALL THE TIME, EVERYDAY, but we often don't realise the amount of mistakes we make until we see them written down on paper.
In the second transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM, but it is different to the first one: Jamie Oliver is cooking food and is trying to talk the viewers through the process, whilst also attempting to keep them entertained. In an UNREHEARSED SITUATION, this is a very difficult task to do.
The TARGET AUDIENCE for this transcript will be exactly the same, however, you may find that the language here is NOT AS EFFECTIVE, because Jamie Oliver has not had the same amount of time and planning to choose his language so carefully. There will still be SOME GOOD FEATURES, but these will be joined by MANY MISTAKES too.
Remember, the show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
ONCE YOU HAVE READ AND UNDERSTOOD ALL OF THE ABOVE, YOU SHOULD MOVE ON TO THE NEXT BLOG POST WHICH WILL TALK YOU THROUGH TRANSCRIPT ONE IN DETAIL.
Mr Williams
Read all of the following. Make sure you understand it and then move on to the next bit. If you do that, you'll be fine.
Rehearsed vs Unreheased speech.
Transcript 1.
What we have been looking at are two examples of speech from the same person: Jamie Oliver. However, there is a big difference between the two. The first TRANSCRIPT is taken from a voiceover at THE START OF THE VERY FIRST (PILOT) EPISODE OF his new TV show, 'Jamie's 15 Minute Meals.'
This transcript is:
*Totally scripted and rehearsed.
*Practiced many times.
*Probably filmed many times to make sure there are no mistakes.
*Full of well thought out language which makes it sound more interesting, fun, relevant and informative.
When people have time to rehearse, they are able to do this because they realise that language is very important. Choosing the right words or phrases can make a difference between a boring piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE or an interesting piece of SPOKEN LANGUAGE.
In the first transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM: This is the first episode of a brand new series. They want to make it sound as interesting as possible, otherwise people may not tune in for the rest of the series.
The last thing you need to keep in mind about this is that the show has a very specific TARGET AUDIENCE. The show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
Transcript 2.
The second TRANSCRIPT is taken from the same show, but it is a section of LIVE SPOKEN LANGAUGE, where Jamie Oliver is speaking to the camera whilst he is busy cooking.
This transcript is:
*Probably only partially scripted - much of it will be NATURAL speech - made up on the spot
*Not really practiced.
*Filmed in more of a hurry - they can't do too many takes when they are cooking food!
*Full of more natural features of SPOKEN LANGUAGE that we all make every day. These will include:
*Mistakes
*FILLERS - Such as 'er', 'erm', 'um' etc.
*HEDGING - Which is where someone might sound a bit unsure about what they're saying (you could perhaps put some olive oil in)
*Unintentional Pauses - where he is trying to think what to say next.
*Repeated words.
*Wrong words, or words that don't make sense.
*ANY MANY OTHERS!
When people don't have time to rehearse, they often make mistakes or make language choices which are imperfect. We do this ALL THE TIME, EVERYDAY, but we often don't realise the amount of mistakes we make until we see them written down on paper.
In the second transcript the writers have had a very SPECIFIC AIM, but it is different to the first one: Jamie Oliver is cooking food and is trying to talk the viewers through the process, whilst also attempting to keep them entertained. In an UNREHEARSED SITUATION, this is a very difficult task to do.
The TARGET AUDIENCE for this transcript will be exactly the same, however, you may find that the language here is NOT AS EFFECTIVE, because Jamie Oliver has not had the same amount of time and planning to choose his language so carefully. There will still be SOME GOOD FEATURES, but these will be joined by MANY MISTAKES too.
Remember, the show is aimed at people who are busy, and live hectic lives. We know this because the whole point of the show is to make very quick meals. Therefore, the TARGET AUDIENCE will probably be young people or young families who:
A. Work.
B. Don't have much free time.
C. Still want to be able to cook healthy food rather than just eating microwave ready meals every day.
You will need to talk about all of these things in your own words in your introduction and during your controlled assessment.
ONCE YOU HAVE READ AND UNDERSTOOD ALL OF THE ABOVE, YOU SHOULD MOVE ON TO THE NEXT BLOG POST WHICH WILL TALK YOU THROUGH TRANSCRIPT ONE IN DETAIL.
Mr Williams
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Mr Williams
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Mr Williams
DO NOT PANIC!
Good afternoon class,
I am making this blog to ensure that every single one of you feels comfortable doing you controlled assessment tomorrow. If you READ AND UNDERSTAND everything that I put on this blog in the next hour or so, then you will be well prepared.
So, by around 5pm, I will have added everything you need in order to complete the test. Just read and follow everything, and you'll be fine.
Do not panic,
Mr Williams
I am making this blog to ensure that every single one of you feels comfortable doing you controlled assessment tomorrow. If you READ AND UNDERSTAND everything that I put on this blog in the next hour or so, then you will be well prepared.
So, by around 5pm, I will have added everything you need in order to complete the test. Just read and follow everything, and you'll be fine.
Do not panic,
Mr Williams
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